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2022-01-25 23:13

Firstly, I like the script-like form of this novel. I think it makes it easier to relate with the characters. Secondly, the word count per chapter is very good. Keep it up. Lastly, I think you should stop using abbreviations for words. Although it isn't frequent, its still there. You should remember that not everyone is a native English speaker/writer/reader.

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thank so much😢,it's hard to come by an honest review ,I'll try my very best to improve where I'm lacking 🤗

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