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OneClaudiaLv23yr
2022-01-04 12:14

Okay so, first of all, i don't know if that's how you planned on writing the book but there are only dialogues. Too many btw. Secondly, the way the dialogues are written seems more like a script than a book but again, i don't know your intentions and how you like to write. Maybe that's your plan, idk. Thirdly, reading the sypnosis, it seemed interesting but not that suspenseful. But again, i'll read to know what's up with the MC. FIGHTING[img=recommend]

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OneClaudiaLv2

FORGOT, when you want to express their emotions (disgusted, smiling) you can do it another way than putting it into brackets like : "She said with a disgusted expression tracing on her face."

HellohworlddAuthor

lol yess I did write it in script form ,I feel comfortable writing that way but I'm working on something totaly different so my next book won't be like this at all.Thank you for the honest review

HellohworlddAuthor

thank you 🤗 but I'm in too deep now😅 I'll use this advice on my upcoming stuff👍

OneClaudia:FORGOT, when you want to express their emotions (disgusted, smiling) you can do it another way than putting it into brackets like : "She said with a disgusted expression tracing on her face."
OneClaudiaLv2

Ofcourse I understand

Hellohworldd:thank you 🤗 but I'm in too deep now😅 I'll use this advice on my upcoming stuff👍
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