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Lordmoonlight
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2021-10-29 08:10

I enjoy the fic my only problem with it is that is short at times or maybe I'm just reading fast.I got a question I'll like to ask when will his wishes come into play like the magic stuff ? yah so that's all I got to ask when it finish 2 more worlds I'll make a better review but in short mc is an ok guy family and all is good just need more chapters to fill out the world and give characters more development

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JadePanda003
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Oh, that's gonna come into play sooner, actually. Once this arc about BOFURI is finished(which is around chapter 40), the next arc will be about him going to his first ever fantasy world.

JadePanda003
JadePanda003Author

About the length of the chapters, it's actually almost always above 1,500 word count(some are below that but the least word count is 1,400 or so). So, I think it's just you who are reading it very fast? It's actually quite funny in my perspective since I write these chapters for hours.

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JadePanda003
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To celebrate getting 1k collections, I'm here to give myself another review. It's more like a self-reflection of sorts. Writing Quality- Now, looking back, I definitely could have done better in some cases like how the conversations inside the group chat progressed. Some chapters like that made me felt satisfied by what I wrote while reading while others made me frown in annoyance. My grammar should at least be readable while but it's a far cry from those excellently written novels. Story Development- The story is still in its beginning stages so nothing really exciting or dramatic happened. The story's pacing is quite good in my opinion, with no major time skips except for when I skipped the childhood phase. The story's now its first Dimension Travel so there's that as well. Character Design- Nothing could be said here, I think. I took characters from different novels and tried to emulate their unique personalities as much as I can. Updating Stability- It's being updated everyday for almost a month now so it's a five star! Haha. World Background- In terms of this one, I think I never really delved too deep into it as I felt that there wasn't really a need to. It's a much more advanced Earth than ours, what more should I say? However, I might further elaborate when it comes to some cases like in another world. All in all, I'm pretty satisfied with how this story is shaping out to be. No stressful events, not much in terms of drama, just a fluffy Slice of Life story that is paired with Game Elements and Dimensional Travelling experience. To those who wants to read this thinking that there will be serious developments, I'd suggest that you should turn around and look for something else. I didn't start this book to stress myself and the readers by making us all go through a roller coaster of emotions. I made this because I want to relax and take my mind away from the stress of work, even for a moment.

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Writing another review cause now it has enough chapters to know how many stars should be given. ************ Writing quality: Perfect. No major grammar or spelling mistakes. Story development: Story starts up good. You gets to know his background and his past easily and along with summary of what had happened. But the chat group appears too suddenly but it can be say that it appears at the start of the canon(probably). Then the further chapters are developed pretty good. The author had added some AU but it's ok, it doesn't affect the character behaviour... *Sign* it's pretty hard to give review without spoilers... Character designs: Character designs is simple and on to the point. The author is able to potrait the characters according to their original behaviour, which is pretty hard even to professional authors... Updating stability: Best. You gets chapters daily, which is best. Author you have my respect to write the chapters so fast and accurate. World background: Here's the problem. The author had took a great risk and even won the prize. Background is based on a novel which might not be read by most of the readers but this also creates suspence. Usually chat ff have characters from famous animes like dxd, Fate/, or Yosuga No Sora(used frequently). But author had took risk making the background completely of different novel that might not be read by many readers. This is pretty astonishing... ________________________ Now what are you waiting for? Go and read the ff immediately.

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