Overall ranking 3.4* ---------------------------------------------------------------- Writing Quality: Really good, you dont have to use your brain to decipher what author means, not really a lot of mistakes. ---------------------------------------------------------------- Stability of Updates: 5* - often ---------------------------------------------------------------- Story Development: 2* - The story is quite interesting for first 80-100 chapters but after that it becomes really boring, Silver (the MC) seems to do the same thing again and again and again, author introduced at first like few females who are clearly into relationship (Hestia and the other goddes i forgot (Astrea or something i think) and then barely metions this romance. Romance is clearly lacking in this story and the story itself lacks something that would keep me entertained, reading it a lot of times feels like a chore. -------------------------------------------------------------- Character Design: 2* Silver (the MC) is quite a good character, but i absolutely hate how passive he is in a lot of times. (poachers for example, romance, ishtar). Girls are a lot of times just skimmed through -------------------------------------------------------------- World Background: there's some kinda weird world but what about it in 180 chapters we've seen it only like 3-5 times so im giving it a 3*
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I do like how you put some thought into this, though I don't understand some of your points. You took 3 points of character design because he is passive? How so? World background is lacking? Bro, I literally develop Orario constantly. Story development is up to the reader, but I have no idea what you mean by doing the same thing
You took 3 points of character design because he is passive? How so? I had to write less, because in my previous review WebNovel just cut it (too long). I was writing about him while having fragmented memories how he was in earlier chapters, my emotions toward him from past and current, and from current standpoint. For example, he still didnt resolve the problematic relationship with Astrea after (or whoever that was i forgot) after so many chapters, it annoys me to no end, he didn't get rid of poachers when he had the chance, now they escaped. There was something with this oldman-elf. The best character in your story is probably Loki, I enjoyed her somehow the most from what i remember. Hestia is just decoration, you literally can cut off her head put in on the wall and she would still have the same impact on the story, Louji is a fine addition and probably the only entertaining character. That also comes to your MC, hes quite boring really, and a lot of times thinks only about dungeon. My opinion about MC is mostly about emotions that came back to me (you maybe wont remember what MC did but you remember hwo you felt about the MC in the past) and thats also a big chunk of my review.
Abadom:I do like how you put some thought into this, though I don't understand some of your points. You took 3 points of character design because he is passive? How so? World background is lacking? Bro, I literally develop Orario constantly. Story development is up to the reader, but I have no idea what you mean by doing the same thing
World background is lacking? 3* Is for a world already set in motion, (if you had Naruto world i would give it a 3*, bleach 3*, sao 3*) the 4* and above are for either adding something interesting and having it actually meaningfull or having a really amazing story and me being sorry to give it a 3* to destroy the ranking. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ So ye i enjoy the different world, but the Orario isnt "amazing enough" for me. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ Even then your story is really good, just not to my taste anymore. Maybe sometime i will return but it wont be anytime soon. Good luck with your story
Abadom:I do like how you put some thought into this, though I don't understand some of your points. You took 3 points of character design because he is passive? How so? World background is lacking? Bro, I literally develop Orario constantly. Story development is up to the reader, but I have no idea what you mean by doing the same thing
Thou now that i think about it you have the Bioshock, so 4* would be better here.
GenYase:World background is lacking? 3* Is for a world already set in motion, (if you had Naruto world i would give it a 3*, bleach 3*, sao 3*) the 4* and above are for either adding something interesting and having it actually meaningfull or having a really amazing story and me being sorry to give it a 3* to destroy the ranking. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ So ye i enjoy the different world, but the Orario isnt "amazing enough" for me. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ Even then your story is really good, just not to my taste anymore. Maybe sometime i will return but it wont be anytime soon. Good luck with your story
That's a weird way to rate things, but you do you, thank you for reading, and good luck out there soldier
GenYase:World background is lacking? 3* Is for a world already set in motion, (if you had Naruto world i would give it a 3*, bleach 3*, sao 3*) the 4* and above are for either adding something interesting and having it actually meaningfull or having a really amazing story and me being sorry to give it a 3* to destroy the ranking. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ So ye i enjoy the different world, but the Orario isnt "amazing enough" for me. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ Even then your story is really good, just not to my taste anymore. Maybe sometime i will return but it wont be anytime soon. Good luck with your story
His memories aren't really fragmented, its more like he received memories from somewhere, but he had to admit those were his. He had over a decade living in a peaceful village to figure out what to do with his life. You can say Hestia has no impact, and that is true, however, she is a Goddess, her point is to give support to others and to update one's status, even Loki doesn't do that much, even if she tries, she isn't as good at being understanding, though she compensates for a more intelligent and proactive mind, still, she has to be accompanied by others when investigating because she is weak. Even Loki never went to the Dungeon, Hestia had the urge to go after her Familia when things went awry. Deal with Astrea? You likely mean Artemis. I made several background additions for that, yes, its true I didn't give as much of an in dept look on her, but that was because we were focused on too much at once for that, technically, the Mc visits her several times a week to talk and spend time with, its a weird relationship? Not exactly, its 100 times better then most long distance relationships, at least they spend time together quite frequently, helping with other with their own opinions. As for how the people escaped, you talk as if everyone did, that isn't true, only two escaped, and you have to wonder if that really is significant, they already lost once, would they lose again in the future? Besides, Silver let them live because of his relationship with the Guild, they wanted them alive to ask questions, and so he did, it was the Guild's fault. Even so, that had 0 impact because Silver led Fels to the mortuary to read the minds of the dead people, sharing with her his abilities, and also making the Guild aware of what was truly going on in the dark. As for the mc being boring, that is relative to each reader. its been 6 months since he arrived in Orario, what about only thinking about the Dungeon? Thats a very normal thought to have, Bell was literally the same, but worse due to his submissive attributes. The Dungeon is literally one of the few ways to grow, and so far, he has no problem coming and going out of it, its not like he's similar to the Loki Familia, having to wait for an expedition to hunt on the lower floors. I really don't know how I failed in developing his character, since I'm always trying, it may be taste as you said, but honestly, I'm not perfect, and I want to know what he's lacking so I can possibly add it
GenYase:You took 3 points of character design because he is passive? How so? I had to write less, because in my previous review WebNovel just cut it (too long). I was writing about him while having fragmented memories how he was in earlier chapters, my emotions toward him from past and current, and from current standpoint. For example, he still didnt resolve the problematic relationship with Astrea after (or whoever that was i forgot) after so many chapters, it annoys me to no end, he didn't get rid of poachers when he had the chance, now they escaped. There was something with this oldman-elf. The best character in your story is probably Loki, I enjoyed her somehow the most from what i remember. Hestia is just decoration, you literally can cut off her head put in on the wall and she would still have the same impact on the story, Louji is a fine addition and probably the only entertaining character. That also comes to your MC, hes quite boring really, and a lot of times thinks only about dungeon. My opinion about MC is mostly about emotions that came back to me (you maybe wont remember what MC did but you remember hwo you felt about the MC in the past) and thats also a big chunk of my review.
Yeah, but i think the World ranking system is for novels not really for fanfictions, so im sticking to this weird ranking system i've created
Abadom:That's a weird way to rate things, but you do you, thank you for reading, and good luck out there soldier
