So. I don't usually review, and I tried to be unbiased with ratings, since the problems are difficult to place. Sentences are pretty simple, more like a half-effort summary most of the time. The idea is well - it's nothing special, though it seems cool in theory. The thing is, it's unreadable. You get more POV changes in one short chapter than mosy fics have through their whole length. And that's every early chapter. I couldn't stomach more than 10 chapters. Every other sentence is a POV change between 1st and 3rd person. Sometimes it switches to another person, with barely any indication. As for the rest: stability no idea, probably ok. Story and world background are average, since it's a fanfic. A little bit of originality at the start, but from a brief look into later chapters indicate standard Danmachi stuff you saw in every other fic, with slight personal spin at most. Characters were rather flat, uninteresting, and forgettable. The only reason it's a 3/5 because I don't want to hate on this and give you the benefit of doubt that the characters get better later, or that it's only OCs that are like this.
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I can understand the Pov changes, they were a mistake due to me being lazy when I was rewriting the chapters, it all ends around chapter 14 when you see the restructured. As for the rest, its up for preference so I cant complain much.
MC from strength uses strength by 5% Defeated Galiafa, but joins the family and in 2 weeks he only reached the 10th floor The author cannot hide the power of the MC and creates cases when the MC is forced to tell a lot Sometimes 10 sometimes 40% of the chapter, may be additional information from wikipedia or fandom
