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Fryandika_Larung
Fryandika_LarungLv42yr
2022-08-25 20:08

if you just started reading this just jump straight to the newest updated chapter author basically scraped all the previous chapter. if you started from chapter 1 and get to the newest chapter you gonna feel disappointed

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ThanatosGreekGod
ThanatosGreekGodLv14

when is this?

Fryandika_Larung
Fryandika_LarungLv4

around chapter 20 above

ThanatosGreekGod:when is this?
Fryandika_Larung
Fryandika_LarungLv4

i think he already scrap all of it and start again this comment is from 3 months ago and the first chapter is from 2 months so yeah

ThanatosGreekGod:when is this?
ThanatosGreekGod
ThanatosGreekGodLv14

makes sense

Fryandika_Larung:i think he already scrap all of it and start again this comment is from 3 months ago and the first chapter is from 2 months so yeah
closeranemone48
closeranemone48Lv14

Should prolly edit the review

Fryandika_Larung:i think he already scrap all of it and start again this comment is from 3 months ago and the first chapter is from 2 months so yeah
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