Review Detail of TonyT in NOW LICENSED UNDER POPINK

I really enjoyed the interaction between the characters and found the characteristics of them to be easily distinguishable. Just from reading them for a second and the way they talk, you can understand what kind of person they are. However, there is a problem with the formatting of the paragraphs and grammar used in this story. Even though it improves the longer the story goes along, the first chapter specifically suffers. Other than the formatting, I didn't find too many problems. Overall a good book.