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I've always been a fan of visceral violence/ horror mixed with fantasy elements and I feel that this novel delivers. I loved the grotesque details of the actions as well as the implications of the kind of the world this story takes place. While the writing can be good, even phenomenal at points, it can use a bit of polish in sentence structuring. There is also some repetition but not a lot to really hinder the experience. Overall, this is the kind of story that you want to read if you want to clean your palate from the usual fantasy story.
From the very beginning of the story, a lot of care and attention is put into writing the world and character's personality linguistics. However, from the first few chapters the story is very slow paced and can put off readers but that isn't a bad thing considering the skill of the writer. Further down the line, I am confident to say that author will grab your attention.
While the writing and descriptions can be really well done, it does suffer a bit in the aspects of their structure. For instance, the first scentence was way too long and contrived to read it correctly. However, there is clear indication that the writer has care and love for the world he is trying to create
Put your grasses on
Sure, no problem! Ok, I'll give you an example in the first chapter when they are in the party. Instead of giving a paragraph for each character to describe how they are, make their personalities known without really saying how they are. What I mean is give them interactions in the party instead of downright explaining their character. Usually when you explain a character's personalities it dampers the story from progressing.
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When I began reading the story I was a bit confused by the pacing and the certain structures of the sentences because there were glaring differences in quality between sentences. However, bad grammar is easily fixable compared to fixing a bad story and I believe that this story has enough merit to keep entertained and interesting. So if you fixed up some of the grammar, you can easily have a great or even near perfect book.