Review Detail of Jo_J in The game of revenge
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You have a great idea for the story! I like the mixture of time travel, reincarnation, and all the science-fiction aspects of your story. The plot is intriguing and your characters are nicely created. The thing that bothers me is the way you construct dialogues, it shows the imperfection of the author's workshop, so there is a place for improvement.
The game of revenge
Maryam_Zahoor
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Maryam_Zahoor:Thanks for your suggestions. Can you please give little bit idea about how can J make characters more effective?
Jo_JLv13Jo_J
Your characters are expressive and created well. The main issue is dialogue. Find me on discord, Jo_J#8824 I will send you some help.
Maryam_Zahoor:Thanks for your suggestions. Can you please give little bit idea about how can J make characters more effective?