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KissMyGloriousAxe
KissMyGloriousAxeLv143yr
2021-10-27 08:10

It's not bad per say... But this novel has startling similarities a few fanfiction.net novels. It's not copy/paste. However the similarities were enough that I almost dropped it- Because I thought it was one I already read. The Time Traveling premise reminds me a lot of the novel *A Long Journey Home* by Rakeesh. The chapter format seems to be alternating between past/present timelines. Something admittedly I'm not very fond of- As chapters that expand upon the past can feel a lot like fillers... Even if they're important plot points. Additionally it's best to warn people that this fiction demonizes Dumbledore a lot. I wouldn't say he's evil... But the story makes him out to be something akin to a genius moron*If that makes sense*. He's magically/politically intelligent... But he's subscribed to a set of ideals that have no grounding or merit.

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DaoofKindness
DaoofKindnessLv4

its a fanfic and more over its a AU

LilKitty
LilKittyLv4

fanfics and AU's need to make sense to be enjoyable

DaoofKindness:its a fanfic and more over its a AU
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ArtoriaPendragon_
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Writing Quality: Fine Updating Stability: Good enough Story Development: Way to slow for my liking, and is all over the place. Half the chapters are based in the past, and we don’t even see our mc in the current time until like chapter 30. I want to read about Harry Potter/MCU, not random backgrounds I don’t care about. I don’t even understand what is happening 90% of the time, which makes it annoying and a chore to read. Character Design: The mc is boring, not all that likeable, and forgetable (Considering I can’t even remember her name, or really anything other than her becoming Deaths pet). World Background: MCU and Harry Potter but more confusing, Random characters are thrown in, confusing timeline that makes little sense and isn’t really explained (like at all). Half the characters are Oc’s that I don’t care for at all. There’s more chapters on other characters than on the mc herself (I only read up to chapter like 30-40). Overall: It all matters on taste, you’d have to read it yourself to really decide. Don’t let my review stop you. I just suggest the author makes it less confusing and stops with the unnecessary Oc’s, as it gets really boring to read after a while. like, I like slow stories, but this is a bit much, even for me (someone who’s read 2500+ fanfics). I’d also prefer if the mc was fleshed out more. But the thing I would like to see the most, is far less flashback chapters, as they just aren’t at all fun to read. And introduces characters i’ll forget about in an hour.

WhatIfMoble
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