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athass_prkr
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2021-07-02 11:12

I am giving the story five stars because ... well everybody does it. I don't understand the ranking and power stuff on this website but whatever idc. I get inspired by a lot of fanfics that I only remember a few plot points from. The prologue is pretty much copied from "Rise of Arcane" from FF . net as a starting point. I adapted it for my use. If you catch any idea I used taken from another FF, tell me to properly give them credit. The plot is essentially already planned out. But I can make some modifications if I think I’ll need them. The story is about a girl who dies and is reborn as Jasmine Potter. She accidentally goes back in time and goes on adventures then. It’s gonna be a mix between the current plot (1990s) and the flashbacks. I got the idea from “A Long Way Home” also on FF. I'm doing this for fun and to improve my writing (speed and quality), if you don't like it just don't read it but try to be respectful please.

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RikySmith123
RikySmith123Lv4

who's the love interest

athass_prkr
athass_prkrAuthor

I'm not gonna spoil the story but I can only say that it will surprise you. By the way if you're insistent, reply with 10 names and if it's one of them I'll delete your comment.

RikySmith123:who's the love interest
DaoistSoulDive
DaoistSoulDiveLv4

what is the sexual orientation of the MC

narutosasuke_123
narutosasuke_123Lv1

will you include Loki series ?

LOF
LOFLv14

Harry Potter is canon in Marvel. There was a time where someone was in an alley and we could see Ron, Harry and Hermione exit a wall in the Comic

SKYHITS
SKYHITSLv1

Auto sem vegonha 😀

BrianG9677
BrianG9677Lv15

I read a few chapters you seem to only tell readers what mc has or will do But you don't show it Makes it weak writing

BrianG9677
BrianG9677Lv15

What is point of mc in Harry Potter if you don't have her in Harry Potter and don't have a character called Harry Potter

SUBSCRIBE_MY_LIST
SUBSCRIBE_MY_LISTLv5

I haven't read it yet, just wanted to recommend looking for a unique cover picture because thus far I hadn't noticed this was a new publication as a lot of mcu Potter crossovers use the same cover image... It might help you gain more readers by finding something appealing that's rarely used. I recommend looking at bestselling books of a genre you like, and finding a harry potter verse related image that is roughly simular for your fanfic. Good for thought

WulfricTheodore
WulfricTheodoreLv5

no offense author but the way the girl backstory was turned tragic was just a sorry attempt to write some contrived bs she got all that just because of misunderstanding fine but lily should get her mental stability back and since she never was shown any good reason to treat the mc that way (meaning she is not evil lily in this universe and no i am calling bs on the fact they couldn't and wouldn't contact her one way or another and let her suffer (which doesn't make sense because james lily lupin even sirius wouldn't forget and forgive petunia and her family in case they get to see her just once and in an off chance they will figure out all the abuse (especially sirius since he was raised in an abused home) that even original harry potter could go through but our oh so weak little op dead mc couldn't in short all of it just feels so forced and out of place like author already telling the heroine name then all the encounters she get with mc is nothing but a pathetic attempt to justify the inevitable love she would end up having for the mc no matter what mc does make sense or not i will come back later a few months or half a year if it exists then and what people say about it then

Kirito090401
Kirito090401Lv14

thank for chapter hope story continue till end 😇😇😇😇👍👍👍

CasualDegenerate
CasualDegenerateLv4

Havent read so im guessing its at harrys time Luna, Hermoine, Astoria, yeah thats all i can think about

athass_prkr:I'm not gonna spoil the story but I can only say that it will surprise you. By the way if you're insistent, reply with 10 names and if it's one of them I'll delete your comment.
CasualDegenerate
CasualDegenerateLv4

Nvm the mc is a fl

CasualDegenerate:Havent read so im guessing its at harrys time Luna, Hermoine, Astoria, yeah thats all i can think about
ZJAY_1
ZJAY_1Lv14

is this story yuri?

athass_prkr:I'm not gonna spoil the story but I can only say that it will surprise you. By the way if you're insistent, reply with 10 names and if it's one of them I'll delete your comment.
Darquesse
DarquesseLv6

Slight problem with your synopsis, the start of the synopsis feels weird. It feels like there is suppose to be 2 paragraphs, and your missing the first one.

GodLevelVillan
GodLevelVillanLv2

Does this book have romance

SAURON_
SAURON_Lv2

wanda, wanda, wanda, wanda, wanda, wanda, wanda, wanda, wanda, wanda hehehe just joking i dont even know

athass_prkr:I'm not gonna spoil the story but I can only say that it will surprise you. By the way if you're insistent, reply with 10 names and if it's one of them I'll delete your comment.
FraulC
FraulCLv14

How come the book still does not have a YURI tag in it? First Hestia then Selene. Smh

Dao_of_infinity
Dao_of_infinityLv15

Nathan

athass_prkr:I'm not gonna spoil the story but I can only say that it will surprise you. By the way if you're insistent, reply with 10 names and if it's one of them I'll delete your comment.
galaxy_dragon_3540
galaxy_dragon_3540Lv15

I just want to ask if love interests is a boy or a girl

athass_prkr:I'm not gonna spoil the story but I can only say that it will surprise you. By the way if you're insistent, reply with 10 names and if it's one of them I'll delete your comment.
Other Reviews
ArtoriaPendragon_
ArtoriaPendragon_Lv14

Writing Quality: Fine Updating Stability: Good enough Story Development: Way to slow for my liking, and is all over the place. Half the chapters are based in the past, and we don’t even see our mc in the current time until like chapter 30. I want to read about Harry Potter/MCU, not random backgrounds I don’t care about. I don’t even understand what is happening 90% of the time, which makes it annoying and a chore to read. Character Design: The mc is boring, not all that likeable, and forgetable (Considering I can’t even remember her name, or really anything other than her becoming Deaths pet). World Background: MCU and Harry Potter but more confusing, Random characters are thrown in, confusing timeline that makes little sense and isn’t really explained (like at all). Half the characters are Oc’s that I don’t care for at all. There’s more chapters on other characters than on the mc herself (I only read up to chapter like 30-40). Overall: It all matters on taste, you’d have to read it yourself to really decide. Don’t let my review stop you. I just suggest the author makes it less confusing and stops with the unnecessary Oc’s, as it gets really boring to read after a while. like, I like slow stories, but this is a bit much, even for me (someone who’s read 2500+ fanfics). I’d also prefer if the mc was fleshed out more. But the thing I would like to see the most, is far less flashback chapters, as they just aren’t at all fun to read. And introduces characters i’ll forget about in an hour.

WhatIfMoble
WhatIfMobleLv6
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