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Peter_Paul_Anka
Peter_Paul_AnkaLv41yr
2023-01-24 11:20

If you haven't started reading this, then don't start. After 100 chapters I can tell you this was one of the most painful reads I had. The author constantly contradicts themselves and the world he made. The is nothing natural about the development of the story, things just happen because the author says I does no matter how much it contradicts everything they has already been stated the power of PLOT will force it anyway. I'm sure if you started to read this at the beginning you haven't noticed how many contradictions there are but at this point it's just to painful to keep reading. That being said I can't really blame the author you CAN notice they get better but honestly the story was completely ruined with the flashbacks and the time travel, I'm pretty sure the author didn't realize how difficult it would be to keep track of them and by the time they did they were already way too deep and needed to keep them. At the end it was just one bad narrative decision that forced the plot and in order to correct it the story became forced. It had potential ad I'm sure it gets a lot better later on but if you are starting from the beginning the contradictions are just too much, but hey maybe you have more patience than I, I couldn't really get past the beginning so I have to stop, at this point the story just makes me frustrated. That's all.

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Onxio
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Thanks that's all I can say people be throwing stones like candy

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