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yo_mamas_ballLv1011mth
2024-03-14 12:16

dropping after chapter 8. it annoys me when author spoon feeds too much. And hot the hack the guy who got conned lecturing a god who live billions of years. That god is the dumbest god, with that toodler level iq how did he became the strongest god. instances like this, which break consistancy and are out of logic, Kicks ne out of the flow and leaves a bad test even if the story became better in further chapters.

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CrimsonWolfAuthorAuthor

Good. I detest impatient and overreacting readers too who jump to conclusions as if they are the only ones with brains. See ya...

DaoistBTW2a1Lv2

well i thought the same at first, well i dont want to spoil you but let me tell you that the ibstead of the god being dumb, kahn is

CrimsonWolfAuthor:Good. I detest impatient and overreacting readers too who jump to conclusions as if they are the only ones with brains. See ya...
Osmar_CaioLv1

It is necessary to understand that keeping the reader's attention is one of the author's roles. Don’t rely on things like “this will be explained 100 chapters later”. It's simply demotivating.

CrimsonWolfAuthor:Good. I detest impatient and overreacting readers too who jump to conclusions as if they are the only ones with brains. See ya...
cru3n3r_Lv14

If you genuinely took it at face value that a nigh-omnipotent God was actually deceived by a random dude off the street you might need to ropemaxx and hope for a better iq in your next life lil bro.

Osmar_Caio:It is necessary to understand that keeping the reader's attention is one of the author's roles. Don’t rely on things like “this will be explained 100 chapters later”. It's simply demotivating.
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pro. -First off, while there are some mistakes, the grammar is fairly good(compared to most novels in WN). -The MC is a true "smart" MC in his choices and while other novels advertise these types of MC's, this novel (so far) actually delivers. -The story is interesting and so far pretty good. Negatives. -My biggest complaint is the lack of information in regards to stats and abilities. Stats have no real value and are just numbers that go up and down. While some stats like strength can be understood by the reader as it's common knowledge, dex and defense isn't explained and is just there. Abilities lack depth and are just thrown around. -The fight scenes are lacking, It just feels like details that should be there aren't. This also feeds off my earlier point as even the combat is missing information. -The authors notes aren't needed and takes away from the immersion. This isn't a translated chinese novel where the culture can be confusing to westerners and needs explanation. Instead the Author should explain better through the story or expect the reader to understand the jokes. -MC grows way too fast. No real challenge as he obtains a super powerful pet very early on and so the story loses threat value from enemies as the reader already knows it's going to end up one sided. The story is fairly new and could easily be corrected in the future so overall the story is good and the MC is likeable. The first conflict was kind of a Cliche but I laughed at the "it's a trap" comment. The story would have made more sense through a cultivation system then a game element one. We need examples for stats so the reader can imagine the differences. We need a bases for how each stats are in value. Right now all we know is 10 strength is greater then 9 strength but that's it. We need references like a normal human has X this stat and that. It should also have power scaling(or whatever the author wants) where 10x stat= C rank, 50xstat=D rank, etc. If not stats will just becoming numbers that have no concrete meaning and just go up as the MC levels, Abilities also need a ranking system or leveling system. You have many abilities the MC absorbed but are just there as fluff. Then the next chapter he suddenly has new abilities that he combined but no real information. The MC goes hunting, kills monsters, then shows up with many abilities, the lack of depth is boring. This alone could have been far more detailed and less rushed.

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