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MWseLv12yr
2022-06-08 07:12

I didn't like the name of the characters when I first saw them, but once the action happened it worked so well with the rest of the story. I enjoyed the first and most of the second chapter because you've got the "sweet spot" between description, action and dialogue. However, in the third chapter, the dialogue takes most of it, then description, then action.

The Eidolon and I

Jolan_Hildebrandt
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Jolan_Hildebrandt
Jolan_HildebrandtAuthor

the action picks up again in four.

2yr
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MWse
MWseLv1

I'm talking about how the story can be improved from the writer perspective, not as a personal preference from the readers one. You may like it, but you don't represent other 1000 peope and vice versa since tastes are different. The words I've told, were at a time told to me by a professional writer with years of experience. You can make your story better for a few people, or you can do it better for the general audience.

2yr
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kerryn
kerrynLv4

Good story setting and I enjoy the pace of the story. Also, not so hard to read. I am looking forward for more chapter to come. Nice work, keep it up.

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Twitchy_
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It's easy to read, I'm intrigued by your opening chapter, and I think you did a really fantastic job. Will be going into my collections and I can't wait to follow your story!

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ColiJiyo
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The character was ok for me, didn't really fancy their names. I enjoyed the pacing and the flow of words. It was comfortable to read. I think this book have potential, gotta keep an eye out for more updates in the future.

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GEEGEE
GEEGEELv13

Filled with a lot of mysteries, I want to unravel. Really interesting and love it. Kudos to the author ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

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Prince_Firelorn
Prince_FirelornLv10

It gives off that calm before the storm vibe in contrast to the characters. It has a nice pace at the start, but I've seen a lot of cliché instances like these before. I'd hope to be immersed in something unique from the story as I continue to read it.

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chery_cabral
chery_cabralLv1

Thank you for reviewing mine. So, here is mine to yours. Story wise, it has an "okay-for-me" pacing but the first chapters presented bored me a bit. Grammar wise it can be improved and an interesting prologue could help improving this. Thank you.

2yr
_eellaabbee
_eellaabbeeLv1

The way you describe every scene is just *chef's kiss* noice, I didn't get lost while reading them. The characters are interesting, and the plot is well-crafted. You really should keep on writing.

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BurningHeretic
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I've really enjoyed the story so far and the pacing is well done. There are a few grammatical mistakes, but they are barely noticeable. Overall, I would recommend it to a friend and am excited for more updates. Please keep writing!

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Uzowei_Tehillah
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love the way this story is going and the plot and character development is great I'm definitely adding this book to my library, keep up the good work author❤️

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