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Darius_Chromwell
Darius_ChromwellLv53yr
2021-09-13 19:54

The story started out decently but you can tell that the author is starting to loose interest already, the chapters have been getting shorter and shorter after around chapter 15. Also I can't help but feel that the reincarnated person in the first chapter isn't the MC but rather his new grandfather, both experimenting on him as a baby and effectively branding him like a slave, I fully expect the grandfather to somehow take over his body by chapter 50 if it makes it that far.

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jdbeue
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I truly regret that you think that I am losing interest in the story. I assure you that it is not the case. I intend to continue this novel, so please rest assured. As for your hypothesis, close to a hundred chapters will be Will's first year at Hogwarts, so please stay tuned for that arc.

DragoPackMan
DragoPackManLv4

no development, only coward mc. didn't hate father or grand father for playing with his life, but became obedient to Grand Father. didn't mentioned anything about wat he learned in his 11 years. did he learned Occlumency? did learned potion brewing? did he have some accidental magic? did managed to control that?. other than he gone to muggle school and he obedient to his grand father cuz he scared of him, nothing mentioned until 11 year old party.

DragoPackMan
DragoPackManLv4

oh, he is fanboy type MC, from how it's shown.

DragoPackMan:no development, only coward mc. didn't hate father or grand father for playing with his life, but became obedient to Grand Father. didn't mentioned anything about wat he learned in his 11 years. did he learned Occlumency? did learned potion brewing? did he have some accidental magic? did managed to control that?. other than he gone to muggle school and he obedient to his grand father cuz he scared of him, nothing mentioned until 11 year old party.
DragoPackMan
DragoPackManLv4

sry for throwing my frustration in this review. bye.

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