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Spirits_everywhere
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2021-06-13 23:06

Writing Quality: 5 stars This fanfiction contains good language and grammar in general. There are hardly any major mistakes that would disrupt your flow of reading. Each sentence isn't too long nor does it contain many punctuations. It is good and pleasing to read, and I would rate it 4.7 stars, rounding up to 5. Stability of updates: 5 stars So far, it has been 2 per day, but I'm not sure whether the author is planning to continue this pace. Until this fanfic stabilizes, it would remain at 4.5 stars, rounded up to 5 stars. Story development: 4 stars It's interesting so far, but it doesn't really contain anything that stands out amongst everything out there. The introduction and plot so far is pretty generic, but since it wasn't cringely written or anything like that, it scored better than what I would usually give. I would rate it 4.3-4.5 stars, rounded down to 4 stars. Character Design: 4 stars So far, only the main character's design had been revealed, while the side characters like his parents were barely mentioned at all. I know that we should focus more on the main character, but we cannot neglect the interaction between the side characters and our main character too much. We only know that the mc is born in the royal family as their crown prince, but apart from the few descriptions about the mc's goals, ambitions, morals, ethics, type of personality so far, and little to no descriptions about anything else, I would give it a 4.4-4.6 stars, rounded down to 4 stars. World Background: 5 stars This is a magic and knight's world that is based on a Chinese novel, I suppose. Since the main character's name is Chinese and all. So far, the general power system had been revealed, but the character's power level had not been revealed yet. Since this is a magic and knight's world and supposed fanfiction, the world background should be more or less developed by the original author. Though, since I can't accurately judge how this author is going to develop the world background, until more can be said, I would rate this 4.7-4.8 stars. In total: 4.57 stars, rounded up to 4.6 stars. This is a good read with good language, but until more information about how the author is planning to continue this fanfiction can be revealed, this is sadly going to have only a 4.6-star rating.

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Kotasume
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what fanfic is this base on?

DragoPackMan
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this is Harry potter fanfic man

Spirits_everywhere
Spirits_everywhereLv4

When I reviewed this, I think it was some other story b4 the author deleted and rewrote a new story

DragoPackMan:this is Harry potter fanfic man
jdbeue
jdbeueAuthor

Forgive me for the trouble. When I wrote this novel, it was actually a rebrand of the actual novel, The Golden Throne. That novel is still continuing in the main novel section. Understanding that it is not fair to write an actual novel in fanfic space, I deleted that novel and started a HP Fanfic instead. So, if you want to check out the actual novel that you reviewed, head on over to 'The Golden Throne'. If you are interested in a HP fanfic, stay here and read on as Will embarks on quite the adventurous journey.

Spirits_everywhere:When I reviewed this, I think it was some other story b4 the author deleted and rewrote a new story
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