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Lancee
LanceeLv13yr
2021-09-05 02:47

A great storyline with a strong background. The plot develops well throughout the chapter and the picture created is admirable. Which makes the whole read enjoyable.

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I have to say the idea for the novel is really good and interesting enough to pull you in, however I have a list of things that could be improved upon. - First of, excessive technicalities. I get that there are a lot of thoughts behind the magical sides of this novel for world-building's sake, however the made-up technical stuffs feels too much of a filler. Even after reading the 50+ chapters, it feels like I've only read 10 chapters of other novels for how little things has happened. Considering the word count per chapter, the excessive technicalities ended up affecting the story progression. - Next is the MC's character being all over the place. It's like his character is suffering due to forceful attempts for comic relief. During his time on earth before the tutorial, he feels like a goal-driven MC similar to korean MCs of the same novel genre. However when he entered the tutorial, he became more like an arrogant self-entitled chinese MC. I don't know if it's to make him "cool", or "quirky" and set apart from the others because he used to be strong, but it feels more like he's being obnoxious. - Then there's the case for author's hindsight. Holding out details and explanations to what is actually happening behind the scenes is actually a double-edged weapon. Remember to always think of how things look like in your readers' eyes. If you hold an information that will spoil the story for the readers if they know it early, then that's good. But if it turned out to be something that wouldn't change anything if known, or maybe make the readers anticipate what's going to happen, then you're merely taking away the readers' eyes. It's a choice between mystery and later surprising revelation, and early revelation that could be looked forward to as to how it will turn out in the future.

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