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2022-06-09 09:32

Not a great, but a good fiction nonetheless 👍 But I would like more structure, the system is ... Whimsical. I still don't understand how can mc afford a devil fruit... At best she earned 1mln berry, but a simple paramecia is 100 mln berry, not to mention logia. Mc is also a moron for... forgetting she has a system... And even then she doesn't use it fully... Adding a twin to the mix is.. bs. Just add her from the very beginning if you want... As for tomas... I only have one problem with him. He doesn't have a body... On the other hand you have a mc with devil fruit that can grant him his body... Why did you make Tomas cheat from the very beginning by giving him the ability to create his own body?... By your logic he then can also recreate Kado body and possess it. Author - stop cheating! You have to follow the rules of the world!

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