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Shut_Your_Trap
Shut_Your_TrapLv23yr
2022-01-25 16:19

Spoilers Through Chapter 219 I will start this review by saying most people who like these kinds of stories will love this book. It has a well written romance aspect which I found suprising. It has some great world building: not the best I have seen, but very good. Here are the things I found hard to ignore. I think the side characters and villains need more developement in terms of their backstory and motivation. Most characters besides the main ones don’t have any drive from what I can tell (as in, they have no goals), which makes their characters seem very two dimensional. Martha, Luke, etc. all serve a purpose, but we don’t really know anything about the characters themselves: their hopes and dreams, what they want to do through talks with the main character. The author will have moments telling us that Martha and Khan talk about personal things, but I want the author to show us these personal things they talk about. I believe it would enhance the story even further. Despite this, however, the usage of side characters throughout the story I think makes up for the lack of side character and villain motivation. I will say though, that if the author were to include more interesting backstory than just, (spoiler) for example, Illman’s main purpose when he gets introduced is as Khans romantic rival for Liiza, then I would be more excited to read more and more. My biggest gripe with this novel, however, is the author’s constant use of the phrase “the latter”. Instead of using the person’s name or some other descriptor, the author over uses this phrase and it makes it very hard for me to keep reading, especially when it is used upwards of 5 times a chapter. It seems most prevalent in the chapters containing fights. It makes the writing seem repetitive and boring, and it always brings me out of the scene instead of enhancing it. It needs to be used much, much less. Another problem I have is with the romance. I think the developement of the romance between Khan and Liiza was great and it fealt organic, but there were many aspects I found unrealistic. Why would no one question or try to follow Khan when he would leave to be with Liiza? Wouldn’t Kelly be concerned and try to follow him? I find it unrealistic that Khan and Liiza could get away with a relationship for that long without anyone becoming suspicious enough to at least try and follow him. And sure, you might say there was Illman, but I don’t think anyone would see him as much more than a slight bump rather than actual romantic contest. I like that Illman came to his senses, but I think it should have been drawb out longer to threaten the relathionship with Liiza more. It would add wayyy more tension, and add to the story too. There were a lot of small things like this that I feel the author didn’t capitalize enough on because they wanted Liiza and Khan to end up together without any resistance, but it meant there wasn’t any tension at all, so it left me disappointed. Overall, I think this author is very good, but they definitely have a lot they could improve on that would take their story to another level.

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TinyBookDragon
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Disclaimer: I have enjoyed this story and like the premise but this is a complaining review. I still highly recommend giving this a try. These are just the problems I think exist and they haven't stopped me from continuing to read this. As I read this I come across a few critiques/personal opinions. 1. The human race is said to be spaceworthy and traveling to other planets, conquering or making alliances with other races. Yet throughout the story the scale never really feels like that is the case. It consistently feels like the only people in existence are the characters introduced 'on screen'. Ex. He is on a world where the race is said to have been in control of the entire planet and yet I never felt like there were more than a few dozen people living there. Most of the story takes place in training camps that barely seem to have any people. 2. His relationship with the alien woman, Liiza, has come to dominate at least half of the story and is tiring at this point to read about. It was interesting at first but now it is just repetitive. The story stopped being about the MC getting stronger and traveling the universe to find his enemy and now it's all about how he will do anything for his relationship. The relationship that multiple times in the story has been said to be 'toxic'. 3. I've noticed this in many stories. When an author wants to make his MC seem smarter or better they will make their superiors dumber or incompetent to lend credence to the MC. This happens here with the MC's military command. Someone in command should not be so flustered or easily persuaded by a teenage boy. Even if the said teenage boy has 'magical alien trauma' giving him OP powers and plot armor.

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shacochan
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Review by chapter 269 I binged the story in the past few days. I decided to take a break before continuing the journey. I wish to write honest feedback before any recollection gets muddled. I am a very picky reader so I may be biased. I will go through my thoughts relative to other works expected from webnovel. The author is passionate in what he does. He pushed himself everyday and relys on the readers for motivation. It is evident in his recent work that kept me reading unlike his previous work. For reasons I can't recall, I couldn't get past it's single digits. I'll be following his projects in the future the will surely be better. Anyways, let get back to the subject. The story is nothing special. A work one who enjoys the classic solo edgy beat em up would enjoy. There are certain aspects that makes it preferable compared to the rest. There is no mention of systems and 'skills/magics' are not explored anatomically. This allows for more focus on the story that many novels fail to understand. Characters are explored in more detail, monologues are more prevalent, everything one expects from a webnovel is there and more. But that's where it ends. The core of the story is set in flaws just like every other novel. The Mc has a questionable incentive, the world is nothing special/ doubtful perhaps and most character have a pretense of third dimensionality Going into slight detail, the Mc's motivation mostly arises from a reoccurring nightmare. Personal ideologies push the Mc in pursuit of power. I prefer them to be more tangible/physical. It gives more substance to motivation compared to a drive derived from an unrealistic unbreakable will. The Mc is perceived with a lot of flaws, the core of what makes characters alive. When the flaws are put to the test however, they never falter. It annoys me when it occurs in the story. Show me some weakness, sacrifice the mc's objective success and potential, loss friends, family because of these weaknesses. These weaknesses are bottled up and rationally explored for growth instead of exploding unfavorably for a more organic story. The Mc is a Mary Sue when it matters. The world revolves around the Mc. No single action from characters can alter the perceived story like the Mc. For this reason and many minor others, characters don't feel alive and relevant even though some are explored in detail. Any given character has to be written like a Mc. That is what makes the world vivid and lively. Perhaps George is a fair character but the author Insistance on the Mc's solo action doesn't give him a chance to shine. The Mc meets love interests at the beginning of each planet. The Mc relys on them for growth. I like reliance but they don't necessarily need to be love interests. It gets tiring. For reasons mentioned above, the world inst exciting beyond the expected big bad needs to die. One example, the juxtaposition of Mcs enrollment in a military and his continued defiance of orders and relished freedom bothers me. Whether the military has reasons for them or not, it goes against the perceived realism associated to these associations. Many more occur in the story making it wacky. It's a good read. Nothing exciting I would say.

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