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Allengrad
AllengradLv151yr
2023-06-21 02:00

the writing is good, story progression is good, I feel cheated by the fact that every paid chapter has the equivalent of half of it being the previous chapter. it seems as though the author is just padding the word.

Reincarnator's Adventures

ieatwwod
3.9
274 Chs

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Jeson_9040
Jeson_9040Lv2

The story progression is very good and I have enjoyed every bit of it. There are not many thing going on at the same time making it easy to understand.

3yr

ieatwwod
ieatwwodAuthor

Just a shameless author reviewing his own works, don't mind me. :) Seriously though, please leave a constructive review so that I can improve as a writer [img=recommend]

3yr
Rolling09
Rolling09Lv2

cool story so far everything is good, need more.........................................................................................................................................................................................................

3yr
CruelReality
CruelRealityLv5

Couldn’t get past the point where he got his system. I feel like I am reading a summary of a bastardized amilgimation of system novels and clichés wherein every character has the personality of a wet blanket and the worldbuilding is unironically worse than a childrens storybook.

3yr
FTLnovaKid
FTLnovaKidLv13

Reveal spoiler

3yr
KingCristo
KingCristoLv2

Yah there's potential here, and you can tell it was definitely inspired by "mushoko tensei" which isn't a bad thing, that's how most stories are made. However I just can't, get with the pacing. It goes by 1 year, 2 year, "after three years of doing dah, dah, dah; I have yet to improve. Don't think it to be boring to explain what happens in those couple years. This builds the word around us and let's us get to know the characters struggle.

3yr
Toxic_318
Toxic_318Lv4

While the premise was fairly decent, the writing needs to be changed quite a bit. The character dialogues needs to be in separate sentences sometimes. What you did here just made everything feel cramped and cold to read. I'll take a paragraph from your novel as an example here; ----------------------------------------------------------------------------Alright, open the gates. The commander wanted to meet him", Rex ordered. "Yes sir!" one of the guards took out a key from his pocket before unlocking the metal door. The sounds of the metal door opening reverberated across the hallway. "We'll go in now. Close the door after", said the white-haired man. "Yes commander. Good luck!" said both of the guards simultaneously as they watched both Rex and the white-haired man walked inside. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- I'll continue my review in the comment for this review

2yr
Ice_Princesss
Ice_PrincesssLv4

I haven't managed to read a lot of the chapters, but based on what I've read so far, the story is quite intriguing. The progression is not too rushed, but it's not too slow either. Every chapter was written with care. Keep up the good work, author.

3yr
Lancee
LanceeLv1

The plot develops well throughout the chapter and the picture created is admirable with an enjoyable storyline. As a reader i got sinked in this world the Author had created. A fascinating escape from reality into another world. A great read

3yr
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