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Nirerin
NirerinLv53yr
2021-05-31 20:47

It's somewhat OK but the writer is either quite inexperienced or doesn't know how to write a mature character. The mc is quite stupid at times and the other characters like Harry, Ron, Neville and Hermione are very out of character. You have a system where if you change the plot you gain a very powerful currency and yet the mc sometimes acts stupid or doesn't realise something that is right in front of him, like how he has been at school with Hermione granger in the same year group for years but has no clue she is the Hermione granger even though he has been to her parents for his teeth and the excuse used is that he wasn't looking and that someone pronounced it wrong as Hermanie and he had no second thoughts about it...

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shillbear
shillbearLv14

so hes an airhead+6 years lliving normaly i can see it happen

Brezer
BrezerLv14

its just a bad story.

Jmtxam
JmtxamLv1

The mc is just a lazy idiot that apparently doesn't know how to learn from books unless he has a teacher holding is hand...

Alex_De_Frost
Alex_De_FrostLv1

I would write: he thought this girl looked like Hermione. Since I realized that he confused her name because he is Chinese and he ignored the difference in the worlds or did not think

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