This is a good read, with a very interesting concept and cool plotline, but it's a raw diamond and cumbersome at some points. It needs some refinements to truly be a piece of art. *SPOILER* The protagonist has god-like deduction skills that most of the time, a good 70%, is illogical. It looks logical if you read it fast but one second more and you will see that it was impossible to deduce that. Another point is MC forced interactions and relationships with others. They are super fast, poor in any emotion or real depth, which comes to bite in the future as the MC suddenly sees Percy as a long-lost brother with 3 or 4 sentences exchange? It really bothers me, and probably many others too. I suggest making the chapters longer to fit in more detail in those parts. Even if it costs some updates, I think it's worth it. And to come up with ways to make MC fit better in the Percy Jackson plot without being forced as it is. There are some cool plots and twists never seen before in any Percy Jackson fanfic, that I enjoyed a lot. It's a good read compared to many other works on this website, and totally suggest anyone try it.
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