Item: REBORN AS MALFOY with a system
Rating: 1

ItIswhatItIsLv43yr

2021-07-28 08:26

The idea was great but the pathetic grammer and him straight out simping for Hermione Granger was a huge turn-off. Also it sounds more like a record of things that happened rather than a story.

REBORN AS MALFOY with a system

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