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Vassago
VassagoLv123yr
2021-07-13 12:16

Writing quality:subpar to say the least and the way the author shows dialogue is horrid . Story development:the author is trying to jam the mc into the golden trio so he will be more relevant instead of having him do something more original. Character design:Self inserts are fine but yours seems to be a bit one dimensional. Update stability:its okay for now until the othe loses interest or realise that he made the mc so over powered that he made everything else redundant. World Background:Its Harry Potter a world where intent is all you need to make your self overpowered and the author gave the mc a system.

REBORN AS MALFOY with a system

GOD_OF_ENAS
3.1
17 Chs

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Anonymous2000
Anonymous2000Lv2

I say this MC is an idiot he is practically inviting trouble by trying to be with Hermione as 1)Dumbledore will obviously notice this and will question Mc's intentions and will monitor his every movement 2)Hermione is still authority worshipping phase so if Dumbledore subtly questions Draco's intentions Hermione will stop any relationship with him and 3)Ron hates slytherin's eventhough his grandmother is a slytherin and to an extent Harry has the same bias mainly due to Draco's previous behavior.If by chance they learn she is meeting Malfoy. Ron will obviously call her traitor and stuff while Harry has no opinion of himself so he will go with Ron or if lucky he side with Hermione. Other than that I have no problem I like the fanfic keep going 👍

3yr

ItIswhatItIs
ItIswhatItIsLv4

The idea was great but the pathetic grammer and him straight out simping for Hermione Granger was a huge turn-off. Also it sounds more like a record of things that happened rather than a story.

3yr
ONE_ABOVE_ALL
ONE_ABOVE_ALLLv6

whats with hermione i really dont like her attitude and her character, i mean she is smart and all, and even oc girlfriend instead of her sounds better than her

3yr
Acsmaster007
Acsmaster007Lv4

boring story.....nothing here to enjoy. ...just a waste of time. ...........................................................................

3yr
zoink
zoinkLv5

wow i like this story a lot please continue with it its really good :.........................................................................................................

3yr
Chris_Fox_5117
Chris_Fox_5117Lv1

The story was, okay, the Grammar and such was horrible... The thought behind the story was fine but over all it was meh. could have been done better. Massive Run-on Paragraphs and very little to no punctuation, or misplaced punctuation. Over all its not the worse story I've ever read, but it is FAR from the best story I've read.

2yr
Shadowkombat1k
Shadowkombat1kLv1

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Bob_Uchiha_XD
Bob_Uchiha_XDLv4

MC is Harry's dog. 🐕👎 Deleted story. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

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Lector_universal
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