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Zabne123
Zabne123Lv153yr
2021-10-12 07:53

Read to chapter 32 and just couldn't do it anymore. The mc is getting nowhere. I understand there are troubles in his life but it feels like he doesn't have enough based off how you make the mc out to be. He is just too casual and laid back but has big dreams with too many set backs. By chapter 32 he should be somewhere especially with his fateful encounter. I feel you just made it too hard and too ridiculous for a beginning story.

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HotIce
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HotIce
HotIceAuthor

Hello, a few words from the author This is a slow-paced story, please be patient with :) and this is a rework of my second novel Tribe Online. since this is a game novel, I will try to balance 40% time within the game, 40% time about his real life, and the remaining 20% is about competitive scene, e-sport, and others. I will try to balance it like this. Criticisms are welcomed, but sometimes (or maybe most of the time) people think that sh*t-talking is being "harsh" to critic the author while actually, it's not a criticism, you are being rude. I will delete such a review if there's one. thanks and hope you enjoy the story.

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Sonkei
SonkeiLv5

Reveal spoiler

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Eleventh_Realm
Eleventh_RealmLv2

i haven't read the book yet but ill give it 5 star hoping it will be good as armipotent also looking forward later ill change my review if good or not.

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UnedeadKing23
UnedeadKing23Lv14

The story is written well everything is good however you should really change the name should be about a man trying to run at No Kingdom building it takes too long to get into I was really hoping for a king the building

3yr
wahab
wahabLv15

I read to chapter 20 and couldn't continue. I am sorry but the story is boring. The writing quality is good however the story isn't engaging

3yr
Prothanis
ProthanisLv15

Won’t lie, the start was a little rough to read (a little boring and slow), but after chapter 45 it really does start to pick up. If you can read through the first 45, you will start enjoying this read

3yr
Drew_Paroz
Drew_ParozLv2

Overall, I like the structure of this story and I think it has potential, but I am disappointed with the slower pace. Maybe the novel will pick up the pace once a "Tribe" is formed between the various characters. Author definitely seems like they have a direction and the main cast all have some personality instead of one dimensional characteristics. Good: -game seems interesting -blend of real world and video game which gives life to characters and makes the world seem more real -No line up of jade beauties trying to get into MC's pants just cause he has a pulse [as of latest chapter, 86] -MC is not a money obsessed like a lot of video game genre MCs on this site Bad: -I am current through chapter 86 and there has been no kingdom building, no romance, and no e-sports. The novel is interesting though it seems more like a cultivation novel where almost all of the focus is on the main character being a "trash" with a cute little sister type character doing a VERY long training montage with stat increases instead of changes in realms. -way too much early focus on press conferences and other news segments that have little story relevance [at least as of chapter 86] -characters responding to the smallest conflict between each other as "do they hate me?" if you have been friends and close for over a decade and the one little thing makes you think that they hate you, that is just rough. -There are some grammar errors though nothing that makes it impossible to understand what is going on in the story.

3yr
LoneBee
LoneBeeLv10

i would definitely recommend, but that is just because i really enjoy gaming novels, but the story is nice, mc doesn’t feel op or something and there is already some character development. if you’re not sure if you want to read it just read a couple of chapter and decide if it’s worth it after :)

3yr
JACRAC1
JACRAC1Lv13

So far it's a good read, at 54 chapters and its still interesting. Worth trying out................. .............. .......

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