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AlphaZwei
AlphaZweiLv53yr
2021-05-27 16:56

Let's start with the best part, Update stability. Considering we have a daily update of 2 chapters, There should be no protest on this part. Story development can be considered as good enough? While Character design and World background more or less DXD with some crossover. Writing quality is truly a major turn-off for this Fanfic. I won't claim that I have mastery over English grammar, but even for my standard, this writing quality needs great improvement pronto.

DxD: Time leap

ChesterCure
4.4
116 Chs

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R3vfor
R3vforLv4

not gonna lie the whole novel it's kinda cringe. issei is always going on and on about how he'll fix everything and protect everyone. despite living for such a long amount of time he still doesn't feel that different tbh there's no maturity or intelligence.

3yr

I_am_inevitable
I_am_inevitableLv14

I expected more out of a person who went back in time like seriously and he is to emotional and unstable.

3yr
Bark_in_the_Dark
Bark_in_the_DarkLv1

The personality of the character seems very unstable or forced throughout the chapters for someone who lived 100,000 years like the events, it feels as if the author will lack motivation or originality, all the things that the author adds are in the 99% of the other high school dxd ff.

3yr
Fantastic_Spirit
Fantastic_SpiritLv14

It's a change. This seems really good. I dont usually think much of fan fics since they usually go downhill after 20-30 chapters but this one has alot of potential. If you could turn this into a complete story it would be awesome. Also dont drop pls, fanfics dropping at 16 chapters is just very sad.

4yr
DJDAN
DJDANLv3

it's good, one of the better dxd fics Ive read a few grammar mistakes but which fanfic doesnt have any of those? I suggest giving it a read,

4yr
Salmon_El_Solomon
Salmon_El_SolomonLv4

It is a great idea that the author has, only that it is very used. The personality of the character seems very unstable or forced throughout the chapters for someone who lived 100,000 years like the scenes and events, although it is an au the author is guided in the original and that is wrong, it should create a story without worry or be guided by the canon

4yr
EverythingRelevant
EverythingRelevantLv14

Honestly the fic is great. People are complaining that he is unstable but what would u expect from someone who has lived that long and was despairing. No one would act all alpha the moment they go back in time, the mc has to develop and that is what the author is trying to do (it seems)

3yr
Nah_U_Stupid
Nah_U_StupidLv2

Issei **** lol[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

3yr
SORCERERSUPREME_7
SORCERERSUPREME_7Lv2

this story is very good and I'm looking forward for more chapters and how the story will continue onwards, so please keep up the good work ..

4yr
Yuri_is_Ntr
Yuri_is_NtrLv5

"I need to protect" "I need to protect" "I need to protect" "I need to protect" "I need to protect" "I need to protect" "I need to protect" P. S. Unique premise??? Look, I am not frequently visiting Ff. Net. But this is as much unique as premise of noble devil son, that was shunned down and unloved by his parents.

3yr
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