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2021-06-07 21:07

Okay so... I need to read more but so far it is a very rough story. I'm two chapters in and there are already a ridiculous amount issues. Grammer for one, using male pronouns instead of female and confusing the reader is a big one. There are also already some plot issues I see on the horizon. Honestly, I think that the premise is good but it just needs more work and thought. Could also use someone to go through and help with grammar. I will try to continue and may update the review if there is any improvement in quality, character depth, or flow vs forced plot.

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Really tried to put up with it despite the issues, but I just can't. First the Cultivation is ridiculous, the MC just spends one chapter every so often and bam he skipped many levels in a short time to deal with the current issue, even the Dao comprehension part is just skipped as the MC just gets a rare resource that allowed him to comprehend the Dao automatically every now and then. I kid you not there was a fight against an arrogant young master in the starting small province of a sub-continent that took 5 chapters despite the fact that the MC can one shot the dude and the tournament took like another 10. That is a smaller part of the next issue, the author loves going into detail about the most meaningless things but has no issue glossing over things that are important, do you want to read about the MC losing his V-card to his wife on the day they got married, in which they started dating the night before? Do you want to hear the background story of the Aunt who is arguably one of the most important characters and a harem candidate? Well to bad as you will get a fade to black. Even with important things that did get explained we had some fade to black stuff happen multiple times, like we got no less than 2 times where the circumstances of the MCs birth got interrupted by nothing before we are finally told, which feels like the author's failed attempt to create interest. The Cultivation system is crude and not well explained or thought out, like there is a certain power that allows one to fight above their power level, but everyone can use it so everyone can theoretically fight above their level. I guess the most popular comparison I can think of is DBZ where power levels are impossible to properly measure but you can still tell if you're weaker or not. So don't expect cultivation realms to mean jack****. The Earth bits should be thrown out as it is a complete dumpster fire. This story would have been at least a 3.5/5 if the earth stuff never existed tbh as it is somehow the absolute worst thing about this series.

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