Review Detail of Alph706 in My System & My Academy of Superpowers
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Hello Author, I noticed thatbypu like to use quaint and rarely use words which do indeed give the novel a unique and flashy feel but I would advice you to not use them any further unless you can suddenly increase your writing skills by a large margin because using flashy words when your writing skills are not quite there yet will make it harder for you to keep up the 89 same pace and quality of the story. It will make it harder for you to explain certain scenarios without constantly referencing which will give important scenes a rigid feel. sincerely, a fellow aspiring writer.
My System & My Academy of Superpowers
AJPaturde
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shubh_gupta:puissant , expeditious, celerity, clairalience, ambulate, aurally, denomination, triumpher ( you could just have used victor). Heck, you used 'visually perceiving' when 'seeing' would do in that situation. These are all in the first half of the first chapter. Besides making me look up their meaning every 15 seconds, they break immersion.
puissant , expeditious, celerity, clairalience, ambulate, aurally, denomination, triumpher ( you could just have used victor). Heck, you used 'visually perceiving' when 'seeing' would do in that situation. These are all in the first half of the first chapter. Besides making me look up their meaning every 15 seconds, they break immersion.
AJPaturde:hmm that's true. I do feel it is hard sometimes to write. By the way, I used the Quaint and flashy words for my novel unconsciously. I never intended to do it but now that you pointed it out I am grateful. Can you give me an example of how I use quaint, unique, and flashy words?
shubh_gupta:puissant , expeditious, celerity, clairalience, ambulate, aurally, denomination, triumpher ( you could just have used victor). Heck, you used 'visually perceiving' when 'seeing' would do in that situation. These are all in the first half of the first chapter. Besides making me look up their meaning every 15 seconds, they break immersion.
shubh_gupta:puissant , expeditious, celerity, clairalience, ambulate, aurally, denomination, triumpher ( you could just have used victor). Heck, you used 'visually perceiving' when 'seeing' would do in that situation. These are all in the first half of the first chapter. Besides making me look up their meaning every 15 seconds, they break immersion.