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kuhaku_sora
kuhaku_soraLv33yr
2021-04-26 16:40

The story is great, and very hot sometimes. Your writing style is unique, and it goes to show from the chapters you released. I have read the few chapters of this novel and I can't hide my eagerness to read more of it. However, there is one thing that I'd like to point at. The story is very descriptive and easy to understand. But the best way to deliver the dialogues or scenes is to show, not tell. The words like "said" and "replied" and redundantly used. It would be better if you can show her expression or the actions rather than descriptive words. Besides that, I think this work is very seductive and hot~

Cuffs and Collar

Madym
4.8
208 Chs

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Madym
MadymAuthor

Thank you for this review and the suggestion. I'll definitely keep that in mind while I'll be writing a new chapter.

3yr
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Dream_blue98
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After reading many book with r-18 containt this one caught my attention. A book full of steamy and hot scene but it also didn't out look the main story line. This story is full package of love, betrayal, heart break, suspens and , thriller. Writing quality: Writing quality of the book is good. As Write already has some experience from other book. Updating stability: Writer won't starve you guys. Chapter updating is regular as far as I have seen. Story development: The story will develop in two parts it will take u on roller coaster of past and present event. Character design ; all the characters are crafted very finely, With unique personality and traits. World background: the story settings is in mordon world but writer has done good job in describing every thing properly. Overall the story is amazing and trust me you won't feel boring for a second while reading it. Even though the name suggested the smuty story it won't lack in aspects of proper and unique story line. Good work dear author.[img=update][img=update][img=update]

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Mel_Aniv
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This story was amazing. I am a little shy about reading things like this. PG13 but I finished reading due to the fluidity of the narration of the author. It was a nice smooth sailing ship in the sea. All in all, a good read! Gambatte author nim!

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Mavier
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This is a well-written book among the new books. It has an interesting plot, I love the characters and this is one of the books that make you want to binge read it at one go. keep going author.

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kpthe1
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This is some intense stories I have ever read. But I love it. The R18 content aside the plot is very thick but still flows smoothly. I love the way how author made this very moving and romantic!!!!! A unique book but definetly a great work!!!!!!

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cosmiclitter
cosmiclitterLv13

I rarely write reviews but I wanted to say I really love this novel. I definitely check for an updated chapter a few times a day. I feel for all the characters, bad and good. The past/present chapters are refreshing and well thought out. The writing is excellent. Btw the writer does write some very very hot smoking scenes. Thank you Madym for such great work so far!

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Wolfgirl1215
Wolfgirl1215Lv2

Beautiful work! I love how much detail thats put into all the characters! I feel like when I am reading, I really know there personalities, their emotions, their struggles. The author has a wonderfully descriptive style of writing, and doesnt shy away from giving backstories either, which is something I tend to see people do. I really enjoyed the plot, how fast paced it was, and overall the writing is superb.

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26stars
26starsLv12

This is well written story. I love how this story developed. The conversations were smooth, and I love the author's way telling about the past. Each character left deep impression. This is so good!

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Workaholics_inc
Workaholics_incLv2

There's something unique about your writing style, which stands out from the chapters you've released. It gets me eager to read more of it, and one point, in particular, stands out. However, it would have been better if the dialogues or scenes were portrayed by showing, not telling. It would have been better if you gave a sense of her personality or seen her action instead of descriptions. But not counting that I got no complaints.

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Gabuji
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This is not a story I would normally read. But to me, a story is a story and you did pretty well for the first chapter. It has potential for it's genre but I have to say. You have a lot of run on sentences, and your grammar can use a little work. Besides that, your story got to the point and gave out great visuals. Keep going, I can see this being a great story for those who enjoy this genre. I'll probably come back and keep reading for myself to be honest.

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