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2021-04-26 16:40

The story is great, and very hot sometimes. Your writing style is unique, and it goes to show from the chapters you released. I have read the few chapters of this novel and I can't hide my eagerness to read more of it. However, there is one thing that I'd like to point at. The story is very descriptive and easy to understand. But the best way to deliver the dialogues or scenes is to show, not tell. The words like "said" and "replied" and redundantly used. It would be better if you can show her expression or the actions rather than descriptive words. Besides that, I think this work is very seductive and hot~

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Thank you for this review and the suggestion. I'll definitely keep that in mind while I'll be writing a new chapter.

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