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random_person472
random_person472Lv142yr
2022-10-17 14:03

I really love this novel! the characters are interesting and the world is built really well. I'm just a tiny bit annoyed by the language mistakes.... They're perfectly understandable (esp if English is not your first language or you're using a speech to text or handwriting scanning app) but it kinda takes the focus off the story. Author san, if you're reading this, do you need a free editor (working hrs and productivity would be variable tho)? I don't have relevant experience but I really want to read the story (and maybe help others too) a bit more easily.

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Dark_Scholars
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Thank you so much! Of course, I would love a free editor. Just reply if you are still interested.

random_person472
random_person472Lv14

hi author-san, I'm still interested (if you still need me). is there any way i can contact you? i keep forgetting to look at my webnovel notifications

Dark_Scholars:Thank you so much! Of course, I would love a free editor. Just reply if you are still interested.
random_person472
random_person472Lv14

though, it doesn't really seem you need one recently, the chapter quality has improved a lot!

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