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2021-04-08 10:00

Over all it Seems pretty promosing

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Writing this review after making it through 6 chapters because... it's just bewildering. It's all over the place. Seriously, like... what? So far it's been a haphazard pile of ideas thrown together into a pile with no apparent attempt to maintain any sort of coherence. Just slapping together every possible myth and cramming them into the first few chapters doesn't a good story make. The first chapter by itself was all over the place. No idea about whether the MC is actually powerful, though presumably he is? There's no attempt to make any sort of understandable timeline, with a description of him arriving in some uninhabited part of the world only a few years before, and then wandering a bit before becoming the master of a city. But that he also spent two years turning the place around and having to build a magic academy. But ALSO that the second day after he arrived in the world he somehow created a system and built a magic academy. And even though all this happened in the last "few" years, the students in the academy rarely saw the MC in ten or twenty years. Also it's mentioned he has a couple pets, but that's like a single line, thrown in for who knows what reason. Oh and he can't be bothered to teach anymore since he didn't really want students in the first place, but they just started showing up. So he filled the empty library with knockoff bad fiction novels that he'd just thrown together and told the students to just go read those. That's the first chapter. Then it starts to get weird. Why bother including well known gods if you're gonna make a mess of them. The disjointed hodgepodge of myths thrown in (Zeus is Odin, but not really, he just did what Odin did, but then the name Odin is slipped in for some reason, Thor is the son of Zeus and/or Odin and/or whatever, and Loki is the god of fire, and Satan is here too just to join the party) is just so jarring that it took me completely out of the story trying to figure out what was even going on. But that seems to be a theme here, having to stop reading to go back a couple paragraphs just to try to figure out what is even happening or who is who or who is what or who is even a thing.

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