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2021-10-24 04:00

So I normally give 10 chapters or so for a novel to draw me in and what really ticks me off is when the author forces characters to make decisions or have certain emotions. The author seems to force the direction of the story in the way he wants it to go and have the characters feel what he wants them to feel. It just seems unnatural and just comes across as another edgy protagonist. Granted it might improve later in the story but I’m not willing to take a gamble on it changing to put in hours of reading.

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