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2021-10-24 04:00

So I normally give 10 chapters or so for a novel to draw me in and what really ticks me off is when the author forces characters to make decisions or have certain emotions. The author seems to force the direction of the story in the way he wants it to go and have the characters feel what he wants them to feel. It just seems unnatural and just comes across as another edgy protagonist. Granted it might improve later in the story but I’m not willing to take a gamble on it changing to put in hours of reading.

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Author Review! Alright, after 21 days of this book release and seeing the reactions, I think I am finally ready to review my book. So here it goes: Story Development: It's a Story about a boy who was thought to be powerless in a world where a lot of people awakened with various abilities. Pretty standard, right? But that's when things changed. Seeing that he was useless, they used him for their experiments to test how much pain a human body could bear. Unfortunately, this test didn't stop before he died. His body was tossed away only for him to Awaken finally, not with one ability but with many more. The kid who was thought to be a useless human was someone who was out for revenge. At its core, it seems like a revenge story, but it spreads out in many exciting directions, which I'm sure some of you will like. It's also a villain vs. heroes story where good variants and MC are on the opposite side. World Background: It's a story set in a modern world It'll be a profound and interconnected world. It's a world where Dungeons exist, but monsters can't come out of the dungeons. They can only come out when certain conditions are met. And to make sure that doesn't happen, there are various Organizations. It's also a world where people Awaken with power, so there are crimes involving them, and there are also heroes who stop them and catch the Dark Variants. The world will also involve many more things. I don't think any amount of words can explain it here. So please read. Character Design: I'm trying to make the characters unique, but you shall be the judge of that. I can't comment on this. Update Stability: Daily updates with bonus chapters every Monday or Tuesday. So 5 star :p Writing Quality: I try not to make any errors, but where there's a human, there will be errors, so please forgive me if you see one or two mistakes once in a while. Last Words: I'm sure if you come with an open mind to enjoy a story, you'll like it. It's a pretty interesting story, and it gets even better later. PS: Some people say the story gets a bit dark on occasions, so... reader's warned if they don't like that? But I don't feel like it's too dark, so please be the judge of that. (´;ω;`) Have a great day, thanks for going through such a long review Yours Obediently, Demo- Oh god, why am I writing it like a letter now? (ᗒᗩᗕ) JK, honestly, though, I hope you'll enjoy what you read. If you don't like anything, please comment or inform me in my DMs.

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