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Yukiyo_Yuri
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2021-10-10 20:21

In fact, I ran into this novel because of the title, but after reading it, I really felt that the author had put an effort into writing it. I thank the author for the wonderful time while reading it[img=recommend]

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ValestriaMoon
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Hi there, thank you so much for your kind praise and your review. T^T I am so glad you're enjoying the story!

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Taehwoo
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The novel had a promising premise and a lot of potential to be gripping, but unfortunately, it fell short in execution. The protagonist, while portrayed as highly intuitive and intelligent, often failed to connect the dots when the story blatantly laid out all the hints and clues. This inconsistency in her characterization made her actions feel frustrating and unconvincing. For someone who was designed to be sharp and capable, her lack of awareness didn’t align with the foundation of her character. The pacing of the story was another major drawback. Instead of building momentum, the plot dragged unnecessarily with filler chapters that didn’t contribute to the main storyline. This left the narrative feeling disjointed, with key moments overshadowed and lacking the tension they deserved. The climax, when it finally arrived, felt anti-climactic because the buildup was diluted by too much filler. Character development was a significant missed opportunity. At the beginning, the male lead had an intriguing presence, but as the story progressed, his personality fell flat, becoming one-dimensional and unengaging. The female lead suffered a similar fate—her character was initially oversold as extraordinary, but there was little growth or depth to back it up. As a result, their chemistry lacked spark, and their arcs failed to evoke any emotional investment. Overall, while the novel had an interesting premise and some potential for greatness, it was weighed down by poor pacing, lackluster character development, and missed opportunities to create tension and excitement. It’s a story that could have soared with tighter editing and a stronger focus on the main plot, but instead, it left me skimming through chapters, hoping for more substance.

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