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BAJJ
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2021-05-21 16:36

The concept of the story is a badboyXgoodgirl. A story with a mix of mystery. To be honest, this novel's plot is good. There's no major grammar issues while reading it. BUT, the problem is, the execution. I can read a story with typos and grammatical issues as long as the flow is good. I'm not saying this novel's flow is bad. I'm saying, it just hops too abruptly. I see the 1st chapter like a good, rough sketch. Instead of painting the sketch and bring it to life, it remained a sketch. It can be good or bad. Depends. I think the author needs to give more time on working the first chapter, or the initial chapters. It doesn't matter if it'll be a bit longer. Good flow and interesting start will make readers feel it's short. Because right now, it's hard to connect to the female lead and sympathize with her. Overall, it's not bad. It has a high potential as the plot seems promising. there were interesting things thrown here and there.

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Maryixxx
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Thank you so much for such an honest review. I'll use it as an inspiration 🥺💕

BAJJ
BAJJLv13

I'm sorry if it sounds a bit harsh.

Maryixxx:Thank you so much for such an honest review. I'll use it as an inspiration 🥺💕
Maryixxx
MaryixxxAuthor

No, it's not. It was a genuine and honest review and that's what I need to know about. 😊😉

BAJJ:I'm sorry if it sounds a bit harsh.
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