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I_am_inevitableLv144yr
2021-05-04 01:53

This story is really good but to be honest it just feels like a huge info dump every chapter. And there is not enough of the system because it's just overshadowed by all the info you give every chap. But besides that it isn't a bad story.

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PancakesWitch
PancakesWitchAuthor

That stops quite early, keep reading

I_am_inevitable
I_am_inevitableLv14

I see... You like The gamer don't you (;

PancakesWitch:That stops quite early, keep reading
PancakesWitch
PancakesWitchAuthor

A bit

I_am_inevitable:I see... You like The gamer don't you (;
ArashiTenebris
ArashiTenebrisLv5

which chapter it begin to not info dump as much ? , just don't want to end up with another novel that take more than 40 chapter of info dump there =.=! (and it also a big no no sight about writing skill, too) p/s: If you plan to rewrite later, I suggest you check this video for better method of exposition without info dump + 'On Writing: How to deliver exposition PART ONE [ Avatar l Matrix l Game of Thrones l Harry Potter ]'

PancakesWitch:That stops quite early, keep reading
PancakesWitch
PancakesWitchAuthor

it literally stops in the next chapters, anyone thay reads up to the latest free chapter always end up loving the novel, i can guarantee that to you

ArashiTenebris:which chapter it begin to not info dump as much ? , just don't want to end up with another novel that take more than 40 chapter of info dump there =.=! (and it also a big no no sight about writing skill, too) p/s: If you plan to rewrite later, I suggest you check this video for better method of exposition without info dump + 'On Writing: How to deliver exposition PART ONE [ Avatar l Matrix l Game of Thrones l Harry Potter ]'
ArashiTenebris
ArashiTenebrisLv5

wait, you mean chapter 41 is where this novel stop being info dump ? (I haven't even start read this yet)

PancakesWitch:it literally stops in the next chapters, anyone thay reads up to the latest free chapter always end up loving the novel, i can guarantee that to you
PancakesWitch
PancakesWitchAuthor

Actually yeah, I am fairly sure that what is explained alter as "info dumps" is the origin of HUnting Domains where monsters appear and then there isnt anything heavy i believe, though, do you spend coins in novels? If now, I guess I've been wasting my time trying to convince you, and if you do, then believe what i said previously

ArashiTenebris:wait, you mean chapter 41 is where this novel stop being info dump ? (I haven't even start read this yet)
ArashiTenebris
ArashiTenebrisLv5

thank for the answer anyway, here are some good music you can check on youtube here: + 'Roland' (from library of ruina, check that music video with thumbnail of red castle) +' [ Library Of Ruina ] And Then is Heard No More '

PancakesWitch:Actually yeah, I am fairly sure that what is explained alter as "info dumps" is the origin of HUnting Domains where monsters appear and then there isnt anything heavy i believe, though, do you spend coins in novels? If now, I guess I've been wasting my time trying to convince you, and if you do, then believe what i said previously
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