I dont know what pea brain you have to understand the mc He is a simple guy who is not much careful, he is a carefree guy and i will change his personality as time goes on, no one starts perfect and that is my mc, i did not put in smart mc as a tag because i wasnt gonna write one so please read before you write a review. As for writing quality being poor, i think you are just being a sore one alright The most mistakes i have made is naming kakashi wrong and some times small mistakes which i am continuously editing and making better Go somewhere else bro If you can't see the effort i am putting itno this As for lame mc, i dont know how he is lame and what do you mean befriending naruto out of nowhere, with narutos chaildhood personality he i portryaed it perfectly as he usually tried to grab attention and as i said before my mc is not some smart ass like you he is a simple guy who will mature with time and realize the consequences of his action, though there will be none unless the sannin, ten jonin or danzo or hiruzen themselves jump at him, i think you see my point and think about re editing the review And please recommend some good novels that you think are perfect in your opinion to me if you dont mind since i am still an author in learning

the fic is bad, but it ahs potential, just rewrite it or something

Yup, I'm with majority here.. Your story, Meh😒... Your writing especially your grammar, like a shit💩... You brag about you having an exam that you're not study for semester, make assumption that you're college student?? But what kind of college students that can't write proper basic English as it's basic core for first semester in college to pass, no matter what country you are.. If you're college student, sure you can write this with proper grammars and verbs??? To me, you just a middle schooler that think he's mature enough to brag about his writing skills and can't be judge when someone else make criticism about your works.. Grow a pair up, shithead...

dude, assuming that he knows English because he is in college is a dick move, maybe he is in other countries with no English

Bro... Qualification to pass or even enter college atleast must have understanding and mastery of Basic English, man.. Even heck its a core subject to learn in any course you take for first two semesters, as Basic English 101 and English Communication in any countries.. And what kind of colleges that doesnt teach English, even heck, he must atleast learn it in School Years, right?? Non native English speakers like in Asian especially Japan and China been taught of English importance even heck we doesn't frequent use it in our daily life.. Even in Africa, Saudi Arabia, Middle East Countries teach their youngling English in school, so how can he doesn't know basic English even he been teach in his younger years as school and college student??

to that argument, let's just say he isn't serious, do you really want to spend hard work on a project that is just for fun and testing? no, maybe he is too lazy to type properly or something, I'm not hating on you, but you denying that he has college just because of his bad grammar is a dick move

Thank you for standing up for me, i appreciate it, this guy had me down for three whole days I mean why does my english have to do anything with my uni and stuff man, i was genuinely hurt by the guy I was not boasting about cheating and stuff, i have friends for that and i was just trying to migke with tye readers I am in a cointry where my level of engkish earns you frickin prizes bruh and i know its a bullshit level of english anyway thank you

Not a bad idea, Kill of his entire village so he can see error of his character.

When you have problems with things like that make a discord server, post there chapters for the most active readers to read them few days before posting them here so they can point out your mistakes after reading it then you can edit your work and post it here. There will allways be few people who will try to help because of boredom.