A magician as the main character is always difficult, since there are a lot of things to consider, it's hard for me to call the main character a magician. Non-linear storytelling is used out of place, and in general we will remember about it after half a year? There are enough questions for the minor characters. The idea of the novel is very good, but nothing more. This is what I collected in the first 40 chapters.
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Thanks for sharing your opinion! Although the rating hurts a little, the opinion itself more than gives back for it! Regarding the magician - Yeah, I'm well aware of this fact. Managing the power-creep while keeping things interesting is a point I'm still trying to work on due to my experiences from other novels. Hence why I'm trying to downplay Layn's power and make him operate without focusing solely on the magic itself - as it would make him too powerful. There is also another reason why I'm doing that, but I can't spoil it yet :D As for the non-linear part - I'm just including those bits whenever I feel like they would fit. They are necessary and extremely important to the general plot, so you can consider it as a preparation for the story to enter the main arc soon :D
I dunno if you have already found a solution to it or already did what I’m gonna suggest now but I’m still gonna do it. SO you could merge magic and cultivation and call it "Magivation" and the energy he uses or rather abosrbs would be called "Mi/(n?)". And the part where he stores the new energy would be called "Agiva". I personally find this much better then doing cultivation and Magic separately and hiding magic or some other uselsess stuff like making magic or cultivation weaker then the other so the best solution is to just treat both as equal and then merge it so it becomes something unique/more powerful. Pls answer, thanks.
Or I could write the novel the way I intended, developing its major premise in a way that I decided on when coming up with the idea. I understand the enthusiasm, but if you want a novel to develop in a certain way, you should write your own one instead of trying to make others write it for you. What's more, this novel is already about to end (4 more chapters or so), so I don't really see any point in changing the entire story just to fit in what you came up with... especially with how I treat the entire magic vs cultivation aspect in an entirely different way. I appreciate the sentiment, I really do, but I will keep writing what I intended here, while highly encouraging you to write something better if you believe your concept is more original and appealing. :3
