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Tito_Lasanta
Tito_LasantaLv43yr
2021-05-31 21:53

the story looks good but the grammar upsets me :c, also some sudden turns in the naration, like going from he to i in the middle of the naration lowers the seriousness of the work. Some concepts are partialy badly exlplained, but lets say thats part of the story. Author should reread his work a bit more

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Here_is_a_Potato
Here_is_a_PotatoLv5

Kinda funny how you're complaining about grammar while your review makes the grammar police wanna end themselves.

Hungry_Hugo
Hungry_HugoLv13

I would say that bad grammar is more confusing to people who aren't as proficient in the language.

Here_is_a_Potato:Kinda funny how you're complaining about grammar while your review makes the grammar police wanna end themselves.
Eric_Asare_9390
Eric_Asare_9390Lv1

It's not the same thing. He's not an author putting out a novel

Here_is_a_Potato:Kinda funny how you're complaining about grammar while your review makes the grammar police wanna end themselves.
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