Item: Adventure with Harem and the System
Rating: 3
Author: MonkeReviewer

MonkeReviewerLv43yr

2021-04-28 02:46

It is not bad but I can see mistakes in the wordings and after dialogues there is sentences that just says what happen or the obvious and the cliche on this is kind of strong(I despise cliche as they majority of the time ruined a good story). Overall I would read it if you don’t mind being reminded the obvious after dialogues and cliches.

Adventure with Harem and the System

Voiceless_Lord

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Liked by 3 people

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