Review Detail of Minxs in The Revelation Of Mankind

Definitely a great story. Author has a clear idea of what he intends to write and it helps draw the reader in. The writing quality is done well but grammar could use a few tweaks, nothing crazy. Also, I would suggest a bit more detail on the world around them. For example, the explosion should describe the destroyed buildings outside of the school. There should be chaotic streets and burning buildings. Same goes for the interior of certain buildings, like his room. These small details help build the story and also give us a better understanding of the world. Overall, the story seems like a promising one. Keep up the good work Author!