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3PoundsOfRice
3PoundsOfRiceLv53yr
2021-04-18 15:38

A word of advice, if you're not funny, don't try to be. Lucifer? really? well that doesn't detract from the plot, but I think it's a little out of place. Other than the lousy, seriously, terrible jokes, and maybe the occasional grammatical error, there's nothing wrong. At least this author understands that his jokes can be improved, to put it mildly, the only thing worse than a bad comedian is a bad comedian who thinks he's good. Overall a decent story.

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I couldn't think of a name at the time HAHAHAHAH. Thanks for the review, I agree with all of it

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Well, I like it, what can I say, clearly it is a cliché in terms of idea, maybe not from this novel but the concept is cliché, even so I like it, what you have to work on is reducing the narration and giving more interaction of characters , at least it feels like it's 90% storytelling and 10% engagement, but overall it's good, I think you'll improve with future chapters. True, I had forgotten, try to avoid placing so many of your comments in the middle of the chapters, put them at the end or at the beginning of the page and separate them, but ideally they do not go in the middle of the chapters.

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If you haven't seen the movie, do not attempt to read this story. The difficulty is set at the highest level. The grammar is terrible, author likes to write in a way that only certain people understand, knows confusion magic and it seems encrypted at most times As everyone knows, five star reviews cannot be trusted

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