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MoonTreeLv103yr
2021-04-06 18:29

Well, I like it, what can I say, clearly it is a cliché in terms of idea, maybe not from this novel but the concept is cliché, even so I like it, what you have to work on is reducing the narration and giving more interaction of characters , at least it feels like it's 90% storytelling and 10% engagement, but overall it's good, I think you'll improve with future chapters. True, I had forgotten, try to avoid placing so many of your comments in the middle of the chapters, put them at the end or at the beginning of the page and separate them, but ideally they do not go in the middle of the chapters.

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