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UltimateSenpai
UltimateSenpaiLv43yr
2021-06-15 11:39

It has potential at first. But the story getting more weird because of time travel which is should be banned by god. Yup its time travel, not timeline travel. U know how she has another self which named hongye or something which is appeared on cell saga. She is also has another self wich is old generation supreme kai.. its soo confusing. And idk how time patrol or lord chronoa didn't make an appearance. When she travel between the time, she created history herself which make look like the original dragon ball use to be. U know, when whis and beerus make an appearance after majin buu saga, they are quite shock seeing ayaka still alive after million years. While she still only in 40. Well the story itself is messed up because of mc. So i give it bad story review.

Dragon Ball Legend of Ayaka

nyawdao
4.4
301 Chs

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Lord_Forger
Lord_ForgerLv4

So did you read the raw or the one in mtl? Because what you said had nothing to do with the story here now.

3yr
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Eins_Mensch
Eins_MenschLv14

God didnt ban time travel, its simply forbidden in dragon ball by i think the omni king (although a god, but not God with a capital G)

2yr
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nyawdao
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Hi, I am one of the translators in System Translator. I will regularly put chapters here, but please read on our site if you want to contribute to our community xD

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AshuraMikoto
AshuraMikotoLv14

has potential but i hope the author can translate this story it has good potential and looks cool jdjfjsjfjsbfufbfifndjfnfffxd

4yr
Chuluo
ChuluoLv14

I really like this story the translation is good, the story is not rushed and is not just a copycat of the dragon ball events and the protagonist is interesting it’s rare to have a woman sayan.

3yr
Sadarsa
SadarsaLv4

The story itself is really good. The problem is that the author can't keep their facts straight. You'll have a character introduced and then 3 chapters later that same character is suddenly called something entirely different. Even in the same paragraph I once saw the author call her Ayaka, then call her Ayame, then right back to Ayaka again... all the while calling her a 'he'. Later they go to planet Vegeta, even though the planet had been destroyed 30 years earlier. The author seemed to have the word "Vegeta" drilled into their head because he also started calling Bardock Vegeta as well. This story also suffers from the same thing most stories on this site do. For some reason authors here can't get the whole gender thing figured out, calling women "he/him". All in all, reading this story is like reading the memoirs of an Alzheimer's patient.

2yr
deMiLemnSAdvenTure
deMiLemnSAdvenTureLv4

🫠 quite good but there are several errors present in the story .

2yr
Umbriel
UmbrielLv3

The story is very good at the beginning until the android saga, after that it becomes a generic chinese cultivation story and from Dragon Ball only the name remains.

2yr
Lord_Forger
Lord_ForgerLv4

Hi. This one is nice. It is enough for me. Does anyone have a recommendation for novel or fanfic which has female lead like this fanfic and not yuri (straight / normal relationship)?

3yr
Soavx_Uchiha
Soavx_UchihaLv4

Well it is genderbend story where mc was Male but reborn as a girl. And I don’t like such a story. But I already read this author's other story. that's why I'm out!.

2yr
GreatDaoofspace
GreatDaoofspaceLv15

Love this history!! Everything is good!! I just want some morr chapter’s. [img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

3yr
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