Item: Building an Empire in Game of Thrones
Rating: 3.8
Author: GrimmTheWarlock

GrimmTheWarlockLv42yr

2022-08-02 23:47

The idea for a fanfic is interesting, but the author knows neither the original novel nor the series. Example: it is the year 289.Denerys is about 7-8 years old and the author writes that in two years he will help her escape during the wedding with Drogo, while in the original, during wedding she is 13 years old in book and 17in the series, Another example is Loras Tyrell who both in the book and and in the show is gay, here he is interested in MC's sister (his summoned general) who is a woman. The author literally writes that Loras Tyrell is not angry that MC refused to join him, which wouldn't allow him to get to know his beautiful sister, which is why he is a bit angry about it. But he is not desperate because his lands are full of beautiful women( Read up to Chapter 20)

Building an Empire in Game of Thrones

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