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anubis1650Lv52yr
2022-05-07 20:07

I'm having a really hard time to tell if this is bad or good here's what I have to say I like the starting point of the MC its original for the starting point and the system isn't to overpower to start off I also like that he's introducing modern things for trade eventually here's what I don't like story reads a little more like a military log with some Flair it does not have much character development it's more of MC goes to point A dose things then goes to point B does things sometimes goes back to point A there's our only real three instances that I can think of that have some character development but for the most part it doesn't exploring characters including the MC I think it would be a very good story if it got Rewritten a little and started to explore and go in depth of the characters and make you invest in them

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Does this fic have guns in it cuz that would ruin it for me

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Writing quality - It has a few errors in the chapters but its easily ignorable or you may not even notice them. Stability of Updates - Its about once a week, which for a kingdom building novel is not anywhere close to enough. Especially since the chapters are REALLY short and sometimes have very little going on in them. Story development - In 13 chapters so far id say the story has advanced plenty. BUT this is entirely because of time skips and has nothing to do with the actual writing. Basically the chapters are the MC doing something minor like a tournament or summoning characters or thinking about his plans again and again. Then the story has a time skip and all of a sudden he has a fort built or a spy network all around or a deal done with MAJOR characters. Basically all the things we wanted to read about were summoned up in a checklist after a time-skip and the things we don't actually care about or effect the story majorly are mentioned (though even then it is in very little detail). Character Design- There isn't much to say about the character, he isn't bad nor good. We know little about his past but that honestly is fine. We don't see any character development probably because the chapters are too short to pull something like that off. Or maybe its because the System does EVERYTHING for him. I wouldn't be surprised if the system has a character he can summon to wipe his behind. Due to the system being OP we never see the MC do anything worth while. Maybe when the MC gets his kingdom this will change but I bet it will only cause the system to become MORE OP. World Background - Its the GOT world so its already built for him so its hard to mess this up. And he doesn't mess it up, he seems to know what he is talking about. He did add more population into the world which I like very much and hopefully this has a Major role in future events. Overall - Its worth a read and wont take you more than 2 hours to get through all the chapters so far (if you are a slow reader and like reading the wiki when he mentions locations and people to learn more).

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