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2021-03-11 16:37

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LafafarAuthor

So its me, the Author here. It seems like a trend to rate your own Fan-Fic a 5 Star but tbh, i can't.... I really can't lol. My grammar is pretty good.... For someone who's first language isn't english but sometimes i will make simple mistakes that i could've easily done like it should be done, i'm trying to edit as much as mistakes as i see and if someone comments on a paragraph i will edit it when i see it! This is also why i rated my own Fan-Fic a 4-Star for Translation Quality I also rated myself a 4-Star for Stability Of Updates due to the fact that i won't push myself to write if i'm sick, tired or have another important thing too do that tires me out. The other three i gave myself a 5-Star cause: >Story Development: Might not be the best but i THINK i did a pretty good job. >Character Design: I used Original Characters from Douluo Dalu 99% of the time. Regarding the MC, he didn't change much after his reincarnation which i see a lot in Novels or Fan-Fics which confuses me lol. >World Background: Most of the places MC stays or visits are places from the Original Story except a certain place i created myself since it fit with the story and it might actually be the truth since it would make sense but i don't know, i THINK i did a good job xd. --------------------------------- THIS IS IMPORTANT!: I only read the manga regarding Douluo Dalu and things i find on the Wiki, sometimes i edit certain Beasts ages to fit better into the story. Another thing is that, like i said, this Fan-Fic is written solely on knowledge i get from the Manga and Wiki so if something differs from the Novel, please forgive me and spare my soul from your rage x3 <3

TempestasUmbraLv15

One of the few fanfics I find very enjoyable on this side. Most other fanfics are either not researched enough, so the author has no idea what he is talking about. Or the MC is just another side character following the original protagonist, or killing him and following canon. There is little creativity in most of these stories as most of the plot is just focused on getting any and all girls while becoming too strong even if it doesn‘t make sense, while you sre basically dying from all the ‚cringe‘ while reading it. Don‘t get me wrong, I love OP MC‘s and a good romance. But a forced plot and an abused plot armor are things I can‘t stand. Luckily, the author of this fanfiction is trying really hard to avoid this, and it shows! The story flows nicely without a forced feeling, while the MC is a risktaker while keeping within reasonable bounds. He knows when to take a leap of faith and when something is worth risking his live for. He acts with a maturity that fits his actual age, not the age of his new body, which I greatly appreciate! He is obviously very powerful, but he isn‘t conplacent and doesn‘t really care about showing off. He just wants strength to be free to live carefree and adenture into the world. He doesn‘t really care about the canon and just searches for his own path to strength. The romance is very good, even though lacks a little depth, but nothing really serious. It is the first time the author writes these scences and he does it fantastically considering this. There is no real rushed feelings as the author tries to make the interactions as smooth as possible, which succedes most of the time. No unreasonable changes in the bahaviours of the original characters, but a well-thought out development which results in slowly blossoming feelings. The MC isn‘t some s*x-starved virgin that just wants to vents his lust and has no idea what love really means. He shows expierience and maturity when dealing with the fairer gender, and does so in an appropiate way considering the situation(age, location, etc.). All in all, I hope this story will continue and I am looking forward to where this story goes. Especialls since the author shows a clear willingness to improve and handles constructive critisism wonderfully :) Thank you for the story you have written so far 🤗

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