The Good: The writing quality is well done and we have a plethora of characters to read about. The Bad: What is going on in this story? The plot is so disjointed that I can't follow it. It reads more like a term paper than a novel. The grammar is surprisingly well done, but the actual structure needs a lot of work. I can't tell if the author is improving or not as the quality stays the same for all of the free chapters. Maybe they were all added at once? The s*x scene made me giggle and I don't think that was intentional. The Neutral: Not much of a horror or thriller, but that might be in the later chapters that are locked behind premium. What I am having the most difficult time with is following where the plot is going. I feel like it is just a list of things that are happening without much else. Regardless, read your work out loud and you will catch many of the issues with readability. While the character descriptions are great, the world still feels empty. Is this meant to be a biography of sorts?
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Is blogging that made it the title so sorry if you have to read an autobiography 😁
That doesn't make sense to me. Do you mean to say that you intend for it to be like a blog?
Greatwrites:Is blogging that made it the title so sorry if you have to read an autobiography 😁
Please reread the synopsis
Well, that did make it a little better to understand why you made it the way you did. Still, consider your audience and try to read it from their perspective instead of your own as the author. Find a friend that will be honest with you about the story and ask them what they honestly think about it, good or bad. I learned more from the people that do not like what I write than those that do.
Greatwrites:Please reread the synopsis
Read Chapter 28 Atleast you would have given the horror time
