Review Detail of CalypsoDay in Starting Life Once Again

It is a good start of the story, but I do have some things to say about the writing. The dialogue is absolutely fine, given the fact that it's written Japanese-style, but you should try to avoid repeating the word "said" after every dialogue. Try to find some replacements for "he said/she said" or develop a bit more the idea, because the repetition can be distracting. I would also like to have more insight into the protagonist's mind and his feelings. Good job though! Keep it up!