Review Detail of TailsOfHope in There was the sunset

The first thing I noticed about this work was passion. Pure, unadulterated passion. It really shone through the pages and that drove me forward through the story. There is a heavy darkness that underlays the fabric of the novel. It can be, at times, restricting and tense. It feels heavy, like a rich chocolate cake, and needs some brighter, simpler flavours to ease the density of the overall piece. I believe that the author is a talented writer, one with a great amount of vision. They clearly understand the concepts they wish to portray. Practice, as always, will make perfect. To the author: break some of your sentences up. Split the paragraphs into shorter, manageable passages. Your readers will thank you, especially considering the complexity of your exposition and narration. Good work, you deserve to be proud.