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2021-07-12 20:53

I find it a real pity the storry with a mc who chooses Alice is something I have been looking for a long time, unfortunately plot is underdeveloped and rushed, your MC is boring and also very badly written there is very little world building and background, the family of your mc is better written and more interesting than your own mc why ? Your MC fills up like a cardboard character it doesn't really feel alive but more like something that is just there, I recommend you to read this I Reincarnated In Twilight is not perfect either but it shows well how to do it. This is not meant as an insult, it is just my opinion, and everyone has their own opinion, the story has real potential I would like to see a rewrite to evaluate it better ,

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